Sunday, December 28, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors 8Snippet Sunday

I hope you all have had an enjoyable Christmas with your family. Our holiday celebrating extends to New Year's Day. I hope the New Year brings wonderful surprises your way. Now let's get down to some writing. 

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This week I'm working on a new scene for Diamonds Sometimes Lose their Luster. It's the morning after, and Shelbie's had one too many margaritas.You don't see it in the snippet below, but the couple is on their side, back to front. This snippet has been edited to get the effect of present and her dream vision in 8 lines.

Her thoughts in the present are in regular font. Her dream/vision is italicized.This version is PG13. I'll let readers know when it gets too steamy. What I'm looking for is continuity and that Shelbie's feelings in both situations are portrayed without being confusing. Any help is appreciated. 

     Groaning inwardly, she remembered almost single handedly downing a pitcher of margaritas last night. Everything else was a blur.
     She rubbed her lips up the side of his throat. The prickle of his morning beard, sent shivers of pleasure through her body. She eagerly ate at his mouth already overwhelmed with need for him.
     It took long moments for Shelbie’s alcohol soaked brain to catch up. Her brow furrowed in confusion. Hadn't his breath whispered along the base of her neck, his teeth gently scraping along the ridge of her shoulder before nipping at the soft spot behind her ear?

 Diamonds Aren't Forever is still on sale. 

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